DVD Commentary Meme

[kethni]

Stolen! From approximately half my flist :D

Pick a paragraph (or any passage less than 500 words) from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

Probably not the puns, I'm not a very pun person.

Comments

Spoons

[leadaisy.livejournal.com]

I’m with boudecia7, there is a bunch of you fics I would select from. So I choose a stand alone that I always wanted to know more about. And you wrote it from one of my prompts, hehe :P

So Matt has no problem sleeping on the couch at Mohinder’s apartment. Not in theory. The sleeping is fine, even having his private area in such a public space he can cope with, but the continual reassurance that Mohinder needs is a little wearying. Yes, he slept fine. No, it’s not a problem. Really. Really it’s fine. Of course Molly should have the other room. Certainly he doesn’t expect Mohinder to give up his room or his bed. It’s not a problem.

Until he comes home from work and sees the fire truck outside the apartment. He passes fire fighters, strong and handsome and soot stained, on the stairs. Mohinder is standing in the doorway talking to a fire fighter. Not flirting, which is a surprise since Mohinder flirts with everyone, but wringing his hands and stammering apologies. If anything Mohinder looks even more soot covered than the fire fighters. His pink shirt is grubby with it, his face smudged, and his hands blackened. They both turn as Matt reaches the top of the stairs and Mohinder looks horrified.

Re: Spoons

[kethni.livejournal.com]

Your prompts are always great fun :)


I normally do a lot of first person narrators but for some reason when I write third person I don't tend to focalise a lot. It's all or nothing! So for this story I tried something different; it's pretty much exclusively focalised on Matt, what he sees, what he thinks. It's slightly more subtle than 1st person so a bit of a stretch for me, LOL!

Matt's perspective colours the narrative, because Mohinder flirts with *him* he assumes Mohinder flirts with lots of people. Because Matt is gawping a little at the 'strong and handsome' firefighters we do too.

I haven't done the 'would-be-lovers-sharing-a-bed' trope much, just twice I think so I was happy to try something new. The scorch mark on the ceiling comes from me accidentally burning a kitchen cupboard by putting a lit candle inside. I have no idea why, I'm sure it made sense at the time!

Grubby Mohinder was there both to show that he had tried to deal with the fire himself, and failed miserably, and because grubby Mohinder doesn't pop up much and I thought it might tick a box for someone, LOL!