I normally do a lot of first person narrators but for some reason when I write third person I don't tend to focalise a lot. It's all or nothing! So for this story I tried something different; it's pretty much exclusively focalised on Matt, what he sees, what he thinks. It's slightly more subtle than 1st person so a bit of a stretch for me, LOL!
Matt's perspective colours the narrative, because Mohinder flirts with *him* he assumes Mohinder flirts with lots of people. Because Matt is gawping a little at the 'strong and handsome' firefighters we do too.
I haven't done the 'would-be-lovers-sharing-a-bed' trope much, just twice I think so I was happy to try something new. The scorch mark on the ceiling comes from me accidentally burning a kitchen cupboard by putting a lit candle inside. I have no idea why, I'm sure it made sense at the time!
Grubby Mohinder was there both to show that he had tried to deal with the fire himself, and failed miserably, and because grubby Mohinder doesn't pop up much and I thought it might tick a box for someone, LOL!
Re: Spoons
I normally do a lot of first person narrators but for some reason when I write third person I don't tend to focalise a lot. It's all or nothing! So for this story I tried something different; it's pretty much exclusively focalised on Matt, what he sees, what he thinks. It's slightly more subtle than 1st person so a bit of a stretch for me, LOL!
Matt's perspective colours the narrative, because Mohinder flirts with *him* he assumes Mohinder flirts with lots of people. Because Matt is gawping a little at the 'strong and handsome' firefighters we do too.
I haven't done the 'would-be-lovers-sharing-a-bed' trope much, just twice I think so I was happy to try something new. The scorch mark on the ceiling comes from me accidentally burning a kitchen cupboard by putting a lit candle inside. I have no idea why, I'm sure it made sense at the time!
Grubby Mohinder was there both to show that he had tried to deal with the fire himself, and failed miserably, and because grubby Mohinder doesn't pop up much and I thought it might tick a box for someone, LOL!